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Tips Beasiswa

Writing a Winning Scholarship Essay
By Straightforwardmedia.com
7. Use high-quality paper. You can get 50 sheets of
high-quality paper at OfficeMax or Wal-Mart for around
$3, and it makes a big difference in the appearance of
your essay. It doesn’t dog-ear, wrinkle or crease nearly
as easily as copy paper or other standard printer paper.
12. If your essay has a page limit, insert your name and
contact information in the header or footer to save
space. Many scholarships limit your essay to a page or
two, and quite often writers will take up five
(sometimes double-spaced) lines with their name,
address, email address, and other information. When
space is at a premium, use the header or footer function
of Microsoft Word, Works, Word Perfect or whatever
program you use. This function lets you squeeze your
name up into the margin area, where your essay wouldn’t
be appearing anyway. That way, you can squeeze in an
extra paragraph if you need to.
23. Go easy on the slang, yo. Every generation uses a
great deal of slang, but it’s usually not the same slang
the previous generation used. And it’s most likely that
the committee evaluating your essay isn’t from your
generation. One recent applicant mused about his
football career and “leaping for a pick and taking it
straight to the house.” If you watch Sportscenter, you
know he meant he intercepted a pass and returned it for
a touchdown. But guess how many of our committee members
watch Sportscenter? Not many.
27. Don't knock your peers. For a lot of our applicants,
when they’re trying to show the committee how
hard-working they are, they end up disparaging their
peers while making the point. We get a lot of statements
like: "While the other kids in my class were out
(partying, horsing around, having fun)…I was (studying,
working two jobs, caring for my younger siblings).” Most
writers don’t realize this, but drawing these
comparisons makes you sound a little uppity. It’s better
to just mention what you do, and drop the “While my
classmates were out…” part. We already know what some of
the other kids are doing in their off-time: We see them
street racing down the road, loitering at restaurants
and preening at the mall. But we also know that those
are mostly normal things that teenagers do, and implying
that you’re superior to them makes you look a little
silly. Don’t talk about others; talk about you.
33. Show some industry. Talk about what you've actually
done – not just the groups you’ve joined. Sure, you were
in your church’s youth group. And you can put “Four
years in my church youth group” in your application if
you want. But you’ll set yourself apart and make your
essay sound much better if you talk about what you did
over that time. Let’s say you spend four years in your
church youth group serving meals to the homeless one day
a week in a soup kitchen. Maybe you served an average of
150 people on each of those days in the soup kitchen
(it’s OK to estimate). There are 208 weeks in four
years, and that means you served 31,200 meals to
homeless people during high school. Now that’s
impressive. But if you don’t present the information
that way, then we’ll never be impressed. We know you’re
industrious but you have to tell us what you’ve done.
That makes the difference between a boring essay and one
that makes the committee’s eyes pop open.
49. Don't draw attention to your negatives; instead,
don't refer to them at all. We’ve all got weaknesses,
and a scholarship essay is usually not the time to bring
them up. If you’re failing your math class, that’s a
detail you probably want to just leave out, rather than
go on about at length and then explain how you plan to
fix it.
53. If you mention a hardship, be sure it's really a
hardship. If your parents were killed when you were a
baby and you were raised in an orphanage, that’s a
unique hardship. If you were raised in suburbia and had
to share your 2,600 square-foot house with three raucous
brothers, that’s not. If you had to get a job at age 8
to help your family pay rent, that’s a hardship. If you
had to get a job at 16 to pay for your first car, that’s
not a hardship.
61. Avoid emphasizing commodity accomplishments. We call
things like honor roll and, for college students, the
dean’s list, “commodity accomplishments.” It's not that
you shouldn't be proud of them – I was on them both when
I was a student – but they’re commodities. Nearly
everyone who applies for our scholarships is on the
honor roll or the dean’s list. Does that mean don’t
mention them? No – it simply means don’t spend a lot of
time talking about them, because it’s unlikely to
impress a scholarship committee.
78. Write to be easily understood. Another way of saying
this would be, “use big words only when necessary.”
Don’t use a three-syllable word when a one-syllable word
will do. Don’t say “utilize” – say “use.” Don’t say, as
one recent applicant did, that you want to “ascertain an
occupation” – say you want to get a job. Making things
more complex than they need to be isn’t helpful to you
or the committee.
89. Don't use acronyms without explaining them first.
You may know what FBLA or JA or AYBWA is, but that
doesn’t mean your committee members do. Spell out the
words of the acronym the first time you refer to the
organization, and then you can use the acronym from then
on.
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